Write on Wednesday … losing
7 Jul 2011
‘I can’t stress how important it is that we behead this fiend.’
‘I can’t take it anymore, it’s ruining my life.’
A long deep sigh. It was the same argument. Again. The only thing they ever fought about was how to prevent this specter from taking over, invading every thought, inserting itself into every day. Was it going to be there again today? Anyone’s guess. Was the threat of it being there hanging just out of reach? Probably.
‘It can’t ruin your life,’ he said. ‘I wouldn’t let that happen. What sort of man would let that happen?’
She smiled weakly. Tired, she leaned against the sink. Cups and plates were piled up and congealed porridge thickly coated a saucepan. She turned and drew on the too big rubber gloves.
‘I’m going now, I’ve got to leave you, I always hate this moment.’ He kissed the back of her neck. She slumped into his embrace while still facing away from him. Her gloved hands covered in bubbles.
‘Don’t be late,’ she said, ‘I’m going to bookclub tonight.’
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This week’s Write on Wednesday is a Masterclass in Fibrotown with the fiendish clever Allison Tait. She set us the line ‘I can’t stress how important it is that we behead this fiend.’ which is the first line from The Untamed Bride, by Stephanie Laurens.
Jul 08, 2011 @ 13:08:35
Very believable – felt like my kitchen this morning. I liked the build and thought the second half was particularly strong.
Jul 08, 2011 @ 00:42:23
I am glad I checked back – I commented earlier but for some reason it is not here.
I liked the feel of your piece and I like the strength of your hero. I was half expecting that kiss on the back of the neck to erupt into a burst of passion. I would love to know more about these two….
Jul 07, 2011 @ 21:03:17
I really like your hero. I could feel his stubble in the back of my neck: you did a great job of positioning and posturing your characters. Lovely, as ever.
Jul 07, 2011 @ 22:08:36
Thank you :) Again.
Jul 07, 2011 @ 15:42:09
I am lucky enough to read such nicely piled up words that you have put up with this week’s prompt. Great work.
Jul 07, 2011 @ 19:28:09
Thank you for reading :)
Jul 07, 2011 @ 14:23:39
Thank you. It was deliberately challenging, I know. It took the rejection a lot of possible approaches to see one that would work. All good practice. :)
Jul 07, 2011 @ 14:18:30
Great job. I really like how you’ve incorporated the old-fashioned language into the everyday.