Sunshine in a cup … Write on Wednesday
18 Oct 2011
This week for Write on Wednesday we are back to our faithful timer and the challenge of writing to a prompt for five minutes. The wonderful Emily Dickinson and “Bring me sunshine in a cup”.
Bring me sunshine in a cup.
Place it gently on the table, right in front on me. Watch the dust motes dance and swirl in the early summer breeze.
Feel the glowing warmth rising. But what is it? What is the strange sensation of warmth and light? Is it the tea? Is it the warm breeze? It is the warm thoughts of home rising quietly within me as I sip the tea. Soon, soon I will be there again. Home. Where the sunshine just seeps in and is not confined to a mere cup of warmth and light. Home. Where the close spaces with their familiarity ease me back into the rhythm of living. Where the simple pleasures of tea, a bath and a moment’s peace in the sun can begin to restore me. To give me back the zest. To give me back the calm. Like a soothing balm the light illuminates my face.
Oct 26, 2011 @ 22:59:28
Love your opening images. Gorgeous!
Oct 22, 2011 @ 15:44:36
Geez, can I come home with you – it sounds like a wonderful place to be! The imagery here was just beautiful and painted a lovely picture of someone who was weary and ready for their own space and the familiarity of home. Very easy to read, well done!
Oct 22, 2011 @ 20:35:28
Let’s hope the imagined home lives up to the promise.
Thank you for your lovely comment.
Oct 22, 2011 @ 11:53:45
This read effortlessly. A strong, beautiful piece of writing. If you were taking this further, then I agree with Jennifer’s comment about the questions. They interrupted the flow a little. But I will be super pleased if you take this idea for your NaNoWriMo story! I’ll be chuffed if WoW takes someone on a writing journey.
Speaking of NaNoWriMo, The Sydney Writers Centre has invited us ( (members of WoW taking part in NaNoWriMo) to write a collaborative group post for their website.
I knew you were planning on taking up the challenge so if you want to write a short paragraph for The Sydney Writers’ Centre post (on your NaNoWriMo expectations, goals etc) , send me an email and I’ll give you the details.
Oct 22, 2011 @ 20:34:56
Thank you.
NaNoWriMo here we come!
Oct 21, 2011 @ 15:56:41
Stella, this is great! I found myself asking… where is she? On a holiday that is coming to an end? Her friend’s wedding in another country? What is she doing that brings her to this point of reflection? I am intrigued, and happy to hear you’re thinking of NaNo-ing it! I’m also doing NanNo. I’ll drop by your profile to follow your progress. :)
Oct 22, 2011 @ 20:34:15
Great to see another NaNo. Great. I’m going to keep the blog updated with the progress.
Fingers crossed.
Oct 21, 2011 @ 13:54:26
This is so gentle and evocative. I was lulled along with it’s energy – just like the warmth of the sun through the window.
Maybe some tweaks in the second paragraph – it’s the questions I think that need smoothing over. But such a little thing really.
Definitely a good writing morning.
Oct 22, 2011 @ 20:33:07
I will definitely look at the questions. A re-write for the opening of NaNoWriMo coming up :)
Oct 21, 2011 @ 08:29:23
“Where the sunshine just seeps in and is not confined to a mere cup of warmth and light.” Love that line! Beautifully written piece.
Oct 22, 2011 @ 20:32:31
Thank you. It was a joy to write.
Oct 20, 2011 @ 16:09:06
This is beautiful. I want to go to her home and experience what she feels, it sounds so lovely. Almost like heaven?
Oct 22, 2011 @ 20:29:39
I might just work with her for NaNoWriMo – then we will all find out what happens next.
Oct 20, 2011 @ 05:25:40
Perfect! Love how home is what eases you back in living!
Oct 22, 2011 @ 20:28:28
Thank you.
Home. It is such a great word.
Oct 19, 2011 @ 15:39:00
I love that you used ‘Home’ as a whole sentence. Love it. Felt the warmth and glow from start to finish. Lovely. Really.
Oct 19, 2011 @ 15:57:06
Home is such a loaded word and so economically all at once. Thanks for your comment :)
Oct 19, 2011 @ 12:00:32
Felt the warmth reading this! Lovely.
Oct 19, 2011 @ 15:56:02
I wanted it to be felt – I might expand it playing with the heat and the light.
Thanks for the comment :)
Oct 19, 2011 @ 11:51:08
I really like this. It is beautiful in its simplicity!
Oct 19, 2011 @ 15:55:24
Thank you.
Simple is often the best :)
Oct 18, 2011 @ 23:15:53
Love the start…
Love the imagery but I still think something is not quite right – not sure what though.
Maybe it is in the joining up of the two parts…?
Oct 19, 2011 @ 15:54:57
There needs to be more building of the scene before the evocation of home as a metaphor I think.
I’ll think about it.
Thanks for your feedback.
Oct 18, 2011 @ 17:07:06
Beautiful. I love the imagery, and agree with Sarah about the thought of home being like sunshine in a cup.
Oct 18, 2011 @ 20:22:19
Thank you. It was a good writing morning. xo
Oct 18, 2011 @ 10:31:00
I love the thought of home being like sunshine in a cup. Beautiful :)
Oct 18, 2011 @ 20:20:38
It is my best idea for ages I think.
It is forming as a kernel in my mind for my NaNo story.
Thanks for the lovely comment xo