Write on Wednesday … the re-write
13 Sep 2011
It is always the same dream. The house has infinite rooms. Rooms within rooms. Boxes filled with treasures. Secret staircases that rise high into the building with no sense of reaching another floor. Then, suddenly, it is all on fire. Burning to the ground.
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This week’s exercise for Write on Wednesday is called ‘the mighty mighty rewrite’, an exercise set by MJ Hyland for her writing students. Thanks to Zanni for suggesting it. Take the opening paragraph of a favourite book and then write your own content into the paragraph, keeping the structure, tone, language. I chose Rebecca by Daphne du Maurier. Actually, strictly speaking, I had Rebecca chosen for me by my writerly companion, while we had a writers’ slam at the coffee shop. And I kept it, because of this wonderful fact below, which seemed so apt given the exercise.
Rebecca as a WWII code source
One edition of the book was used by the Germans in World War II as a code source. Sentences would be made using single words in the book, referred to by page number, line and position in the line. One copy was kept at Rommel’s headquarters, and the other was carried by German Abwehr agents infiltrated in Cairo after crossing Egypt by car, guided by Count László Almásy.This code was never used, however, because the radio section of the HQ was captured in a skirmish and hence the Germans suspected that the code was compromised. This use of the book is referred to in Ken Follett’s novel The Key to Rebecca – where a (fictional) spy does use it to pass critical information to Rommel.
This use of the novel was also referred to in Michael Ondaatje’s novel The English Patient.
(From the entry in Wikipedia for Rebecca)
Sif Dal
Sep 18, 2011 @ 13:20:57
LOL, I also thought this was the original paragraph – I kind of wish I could read the original better for comparison, but this read very well, very intriguing, if it were a book, I would keep reading to find out more :).
Stella Orbit
Sep 27, 2011 @ 09:35:56
Funny!
Have you read the book?
Jennifer Smart
Sep 15, 2011 @ 21:52:48
Ah, just gorgeous and atmospheric.
Andy at WordsAndPen
Sep 15, 2011 @ 00:43:57
Oh! I thought that was the original paragraph. The word “dam” was perfect to give me thrills. Great job!
Ink Paper Pen
Sep 14, 2011 @ 22:23:20
This was really great. A story in it’s own right and one I would like to read. You could continue with this…
x
Lene
Sep 14, 2011 @ 16:57:00
Perfect. This is absolutely perfect. Scary, eerie and beautiful. I loved it.
Sheri Bomb
Sep 14, 2011 @ 10:45:40
LOVE your rewrite! I’ve had similar dreams myself and you captured the feelings and imagery perfectly!
Jodie Ansted
Sep 14, 2011 @ 09:41:48
Really well done! I want more. :)
Stephanie
Sep 14, 2011 @ 05:00:18
Wonderful use of words! I could picture in my mind all of the descriptions! Nice work!!
Stella Orbit
Sep 17, 2011 @ 22:39:23
Thank you.
The images were vivid in my mind’s eye.
That helped, a lot.
Anne @ Domesblissity
Sep 13, 2011 @ 21:32:42
That was fantastic. I loved “Rebecca”. This could’ve quite easily been the first paragraph.
Anne @ Domesblissity
Stella Orbit
Sep 17, 2011 @ 14:20:15
Thank you.
I worked hard on the structure.
Kylie L
Sep 13, 2011 @ 21:15:04
Excellent. If Daphne was alive she’d be spewing she didn’t use that version. x
Stella Orbit
Sep 17, 2011 @ 14:18:49
Thank you, you are too kind x
Tina
Sep 13, 2011 @ 21:14:15
Chilling & intense, very well done! This seems like a fun exercise. I’m intrigued by the story of the “code” within the pages. Reminds me of a similar “code” sewn into quilts hung on washing lines that directed the slaves escaping from America to Canada in the underground railway.
Stella Orbit
Sep 17, 2011 @ 14:14:15
Thank you.
I did enjoy writing this one.
The quilts sound amazing.
I’m definitely looking that up.
Car
Sep 13, 2011 @ 19:02:26
Wow. I seriously got the chills with this piece. Well done!
I love the interesting fact you also added at the end (I added an interesting tidbit too, but mine was more on remembering, for me personally)
Stella Orbit
Sep 17, 2011 @ 14:13:40
Thank you.
I loved the part about the code.
Brilliant.
Sarah Mac
Sep 13, 2011 @ 17:08:12
A great rewrite. I can’t believe how brave people are being in their choice of book and how well they are rewriting the first paragraph in their own style!
Stella Orbit
Sep 17, 2011 @ 14:12:38
I am glad now that my writing companion chose Rebecca. I didn’t know how I would manage it at first.
Sometime, you just have to dive in.
K.D. Storm
Sep 13, 2011 @ 15:01:32
That was great. Good job.
Stella Orbit
Sep 17, 2011 @ 14:11:24
Thank you.
Karen
Sep 13, 2011 @ 14:40:04
Wonderful! Love it. It gave me chills.
Stella Orbit
Sep 17, 2011 @ 14:10:55
Thank you. I’ve just been over to the rhythm method to see what you’ve been up to; and it was completely unexpected.